So today i have decided to read your story,which was the most rightful decision that i have ever picked in my R2DA wikia history.Your story was so exciting that it really made me cry,i really would want to write a backstory similar to yours,but i have no space in my wikia page,so yeah let's forget about that.I wanted to adress some critizsm about your story
First of all:The story isn't connecting as much as other stories i have seen,but if you do something with it,remember that even if you don't change your routes,i will still be reading it
Second of all:Please try adding character that stick to your story,like idk a character that does something specific as painting or something like that.
Third of all:Try maybe writing about like what happend in your expierience with a certain obby or a boss,like "oh no he shoot me,now i got a scar for live" or something like that,try to document your first round of an obby or a boss fight
if you ignored this critisizm,that's perfectly fine,do what you want to do,don't let people make your dreams diffrent that you wanted them to be