Board Thread:Lores/@comment-31509000-20170614080316/@comment-31509000-20170614084903

SadnessRBLX wrote: my review:

-its not formatted

-there's randomly capitalized letters and generally subpar grammar

-you self-inserted yourself as a character that could be regarded as "cool" if not for the fact that it's you (jk don't hurt me)

-I mean like u tried but it's not really good writing, looks like something a 5th/6th grader would write

-also I cringed at like 1 or 2 parts :( Thanksfor the review it lets me know what I need to change!