Board Thread:Lores/@comment-31509000-20170614080316/@comment-30122104-20170614084641

my review:

-its not formatted

-there's randomly capitalized letters and generally subpar grammar

-you self-inserted yourself as a character that could be regarded as "cool" if not for the fact that it's you

-I mean like u tried but it's not really good writing, looks like something a 5th/6th grader would write

-also I cringed at like 1 or 2 parts :(